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I am planning a trip with my friend named Océane. We are going to leave on July 18 and we will come back on August 18. We will get there in Eurostar. We will stay in a hotel near Buckingham Palace. I can expect to lot of rain. We will pay for visit Buckingham Palace and Big Ben. We will go to the Tower Bridge and admire the Thames. We will go too to London Eye and too St. Paul's. These monuments are magnificient . We will buy gift for our friends and especially for my parents, it's their birthday soon. Océane wants buy gifts four his brother. Because, he will soon marry.

Svp dites moi votre avis et corrigez si il y a des fautes. Et je trouve que je répète trop souvent "we will". Svp corrigez et dites moi votre avis.

I am planning a trip with my friend named Océane. We are going to leave on July 18 and we will come back on August 18. We will get there in Eurostar. We will st

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  • En anglais il n'y a pas d'accent, donc enlève le sur océane.
    For pas "four".
    Je ne suis plus sûr mais je crois qu'on dis "get married". ^^

  • Bonsoir! 
      Tu peux parfois supprimer des mots pour ne pas donner cette impression de répétition :
    "We are going to leave on July 18 and will come back on August 18." (là par exemple j'ai supprimé le 'We' mais la phrase reste correcte :) 
      Tu peux aussi contracter le "We will" par "We'll" et c'est également correct :
      We'll stay in a hotel near Buckingham Palace and I can expect a lot of rain" 
     Tu peux ne pas utiliser le "We will" et changer un peu le sens de ta phrase : 
    I would like to visit Buckingham Palace and Big Ben so I bought 2 tickets. Then, we will also go to the Tower Bridge, admire the Thames, have fun to London Eye and finally visit St. Paul's. These monuments are magnificient . I will  buy gift for our friends and especially for my parents, it's their birthday soon. Océane would like to buy gifts for his brother because he will marry soon"
      Voilà ! J'ai supprimé des mots inutiles, rajouté des mots qui peuvent enrichir ta rédaction et t'ai donné quelques conseils :)
      Bonne soirée et bon courage !

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