Quelqu'un peut corriger le texte svp!!! c en ANGLAIS During my holidays, ....We went to Mc donald's, i ate a hamburger and i drank a sprite. After, we went to C
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Quelqu'un peut corriger le texte svp!!! c en ANGLAIS
"During my holidays, ....We went to Mc donald's, i ate a hamburger and i drank a sprite. After, we went to Créteil to go shoppings. We went to Pimkie, i bought a blau jacket and i also went to Jennyfer and i bought dresses and black jeans.It was a funny day... I went to Spain with my family. It was very cool and beautiful. First Day i went to my oncle and i ate charros: it was delicious. After, we left to the park attraction: it was very very good and we have enjoy. Last day, i and my family went to the wedding my aunt"
merci!
"During my holidays, ....We went to Mc donald's, i ate a hamburger and i drank a sprite. After, we went to Créteil to go shoppings. We went to Pimkie, i bought a blau jacket and i also went to Jennyfer and i bought dresses and black jeans.It was a funny day... I went to Spain with my family. It was very cool and beautiful. First Day i went to my oncle and i ate charros: it was delicious. After, we left to the park attraction: it was very very good and we have enjoy. Last day, i and my family went to the wedding my aunt"
merci!
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1. Réponse filounettelove
-Pas de S a SHOPPING a la ligne 2
-BLUE jacket, pas blau a la ligne 3
-AMUSEMENT PARK, pas park attraction a la ligne 6
-WE HAD enjoy, pas we have enjoy, a la ligne 6 ! ton texte est au passé, ne met pas du présent d'un coup, comme ca
-My family and I went to my aunt's wedding , pour la derniere phrase.
J'espere tavoir aidé ! -
2. Réponse PAU64
During my holidays, we went to Mc Donald's, I ate a hamburger and I drank a sprite. After, we went to Creteil to go shopping. We went to Pimkie, I bought a blue jacket and I also went to Jennyfer and I bought dresses and black jeans. It was a funny day... Then, I went to Spain with my family. It was very cool and beautiful. On the first Day I went to my uncle and I ate charros : it was delicious. After, we left to the attraction park : it was great and we had enjoy. On last day, my family and I went to my aunt's wedding.
Je t'ai corrigé les fautes et j'ai rajouté "Then" un moment donné et au lieu de dire "very very very" j'ai remplacé par "great". Et fais attention "I" s'écrit toujours en majuscules !